Sep 23, 2009 15:13
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retomber en flocons de tendresse
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Hello,
Could you help me?
It's from a inner monologue about the guardian angel.
Ton indulgence à mon égard est si remarquable, qu'elle évanouit ta colère qui *retombe sur moi en flocons de tendress*.
Thank you in advance!
Could you help me?
It's from a inner monologue about the guardian angel.
Ton indulgence à mon égard est si remarquable, qu'elle évanouit ta colère qui *retombe sur moi en flocons de tendress*.
Thank you in advance!
Proposed translations
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Change log
Sep 23, 2009 15:20: Stéphanie Soudais changed "Term asked" from "retomber en flocons de tendress" to "retomber en flocons de tendresse"
Proposed translations
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Susan Nicholls
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falls down upon me in tender snowflakes
Something like:
your anger evaporates and falls back down upon me in tender snowflakes
Bit of poetic geography? Assuming the "snow" is there between the lines (hot anger cooled to gentle snowflakes)?
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Note added at 2 days2 hrs (2009-09-25 17:29:36 GMT) Post-grading
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Thank you - I rather like Carol´s actually!
your anger evaporates and falls back down upon me in tender snowflakes
Bit of poetic geography? Assuming the "snow" is there between the lines (hot anger cooled to gentle snowflakes)?
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Note added at 2 days2 hrs (2009-09-25 17:29:36 GMT) Post-grading
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Thank you - I rather like Carol´s actually!
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| The author likes yours! |
4 KudoZ points awarded for this answer.
Comment: "Thank you, Susan!"
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28 mins
falling upon me as flakes of tenderness
If I had to draw a picture of this, I would see the angel's mercy transforming the big drops of rain of his wrath (cf: Noah's Flood) into light and soft snowflakes of tenderness.
Note from asker:
| Thank you, Samuel! |
24 mins
Verginia Ophof
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Belize
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with covers me with flakes of tenderness/wraps me in flakes of tenderness
:)
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your indulgence towards me is so remarkable that it dissolves your anger which drapes me in flakes of tenderness
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Note added at 1 hr (2009-09-23 16:45:41 GMT)
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actually, I see it as : the anger dissolves into flakes of tenderness that fall on me
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Note added at 1 hr (2009-09-23 16:44:14 GMT)
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your indulgence towards me is so remarkable that it dissolves your anger which drapes me in flakes of tenderness
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Note added at 1 hr (2009-09-23 16:45:41 GMT)
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actually, I see it as : the anger dissolves into flakes of tenderness that fall on me
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| Thank you, Verginia! |
4 hrs
Carol Gullidge
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80
envelopes me in a shower of tenderness
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embraces me with a shower of tenderness
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OR
showers me with flakes of tenderness
embraces me with a shower of tenderness
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Note added at 4 hrs (2009-09-23 19:21:19 GMT)
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OR
showers me with flakes of tenderness
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| Thank you, Carol! |
15 hrs
it disperses your anger in the softness of snowflakes
I agree that it is "indulgence" that governs the sentence and I have noted that the comma before "qu'elle..." is redundant so here's another option
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or of falling snowflakes ooops
or dissolves if you prefer as you can play round with évanouir
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or of falling snowflakes ooops
or dissolves if you prefer as you can play round with évanouir
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| Thank you, roisin56! |
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2 hrs
sprinkles me with tenderness instead
..that it dissolves your anger and sprinkles me with tenderness instead.
Another approach.
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I think calling them snowflakes might be taking it too far and I don't like the idea of falling flakes as it makes me think of dandruff!
Another approach.
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I think calling them snowflakes might be taking it too far and I don't like the idea of falling flakes as it makes me think of dandruff!
Note from asker:
| Thank you, Anne-Marie! |
Discussion
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