put in ...then put at.... in..."

English translation: no less wordy, but more elegant - see below

07:56 Aug 31, 2005

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Medical - Chemistry; Chem Sci/Eng

English term or phrase: put in ...then put at.... in..."

The product with batch No. 020401 was put in a weighting bottle with the cover open, which was then put at 25¡æ and RH (relative humidity) 92.5% (saturated KNO3) in a hermetically sealed container. Sampling was conducted on days 5 and 10 to measure the level of moisture with the measurement results shown in Table 10-2.

Question: the " ...put in ...then put at.... in..." structure sounds so wordy, can somebody kindly help give me a more concise way to say it?

TIA!

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Selected answer:no less wordy, but more elegant - see below

Explanation:
you could write "the product.... was put in a weighting bottle with the cover open, which was then placed in a hermetically sealed container at ..." It scans better (and so is easier to follow) and avoids repetition of "put".

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Marie-Hélène Hayles
Local time: 08:31

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Thank you all for kind help!
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no less wordy, but more elegant - see below

Marie-Hélène Hayles

Anne Grimes

was placed in

Andrey Rykov

Discussion entries: 2

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8 mins confidence:

put in ...then put at.... in... was placed in

Explanation:
instead of first "put in"

Andrey Rykov
Russian Federation
Local time: 09:31
Native speaker of:

Russian

11 mins confidence:

peer agreement (net): +2

put in ...then put at.... in...

no less wordy, but more elegant - see below

Marie-Hélène Hayles
Local time: 08:31
Specializes in field
Native speaker of: English
PRO pts in category: 16

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Thank you all for kind help!

13 mins confidence:

put in ...then put at.... in... Ok

Explanation:
The product ...was put into an open weighting bottle, raised to .....etc, ....in a hermetically sealed container.

Anne Grimes
Canada
Local time: 02:31
Native speaker of:

English

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